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Alexa

Alexa is a device by Samsung that is voice-activated and has useful functionality. Many people are happy with its effectiveness, and many say that it works very well. Many of these devices have been sold. Alexa, in addition to her voice recognition features, also sends Amazon information about its user. It sends Amazon most searched up results. People, however, do not find this to be nefariously bad. This is probably because many other household devices are similar to Alexa in terms of being "smart" and sending back results. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/alexa-what-are-you-doing-with-my-familys-personal-info/



How to Make the iPhone Safer

In modern times, where the use of smartphones is prominent, a normal child spends about six hours looking at a screen.

Research shows that with more screen time, the higher the risk for suicide.

      • With a strong claim like this, we need to see where this research is coming from or who is doing it. Unfortunately, the article does not show where this information is coming from.; Research shows that with more screen time, the higher the risk for suicide.

One solution to this problem would be to limit the usage of the iPhone.

      • Here, I just completely simplified the sentence to make the message clearer.; One solution to this problem would be not to completely eliminate the usage of an iPhone but to limit it.

It has been shown that people who do not use the iPhone are less happy in comparison to people who use it sparingly.

Another solution would be to regulate what can be seen on the iPhone.

      • I added the assumed missing word "to" and changed "could" to "can."; Another solution would be regulate what could be seen on the iPhone.

This, however, poses a problem for many social media sites.

      • I added commas to the sentence to enclose "however." And I changed "to" to "for."; This however poses a problem to many social media sites.

Though difficult for other companies, making their products safer is easy for Apple and by doing so, their sales will increase, benefiting Apple and their customer.

SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/does-apple-have-an-obligation-to-make-the-iphone-safer-for-kids/ Edited by Michael Morrow

Make sure you closely proofread your work. Teachers and professor will take off points for tedious and simple mistakes. Always try to find out were the research of something os coming from.

How to Make the iPhone Safer

In modern times, where the use of smartphones is prominent, a normal child spends about six hours looking at a screen. Research shows that with more screen time, the higher the risk for suicide. One solution to this problem would be to limit the usage of the iPhone. It has been shown that people who do not use the iPhone are less happy in comparison to people who use it sparingly. Another solution would be to regulate what can be seen on the iPhone. This, however, poses a problem for many social media sites. Though difficult for other companies, making their products safer is easy for Apple and by doing so, their sales will increase, benefiting Apple and their customer.

SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/does-apple-have-an-obligation-to-make-the-iphone-safer-for-kids/



Perception of Femininity and its Effect on Actions

Women are more environmentally-friendly people compared to men, which means they litter less and recycle more, and it has been thought that this behavior was caused by women's firm belief in altruism.

      • I changed the wording in this sentence that was in the commas.; Women are more environmentally-friendly people compared to men, littering less and recycling more than them, and it has been thought that this behavior was caused by women's firm belief in altruism.

However, recent studies have shown that men shun eco-friendly actions as it may negatively affect their masculinity.

In the research with over 2,000 participants from both genders, results have shown that both sexes viewed a person who brought a reusable canvas bag than a plastic bag to be more feminine regardless of the person's actual gender.

In another experiment, the participants felt more feminine when they recalled an experience in which they had performed an eco-friendly deed.

According to a study, men were given a pink gift card with a floral pattern and were asked to imagine what they would buy with it, and the data reported that the men showed the pink card would imagine themselves buying non-green products as to reassert their masculinity compared to the men that were shown a standard gift card.

      • I corrected the verb usage from "shown" to "showed." "Have shown" would have worked as well if you want to keep "shown." Changed "showed" to "reported." Also, the beginning was changed to "According to a study." This was to avoid the already stated "another."; In another study, men were given a pink gift card with a floral pattern and were asked to imagine what they would buy with it, and the data showed that the men shown the pink card would imagine themselves buying non-green products as to reassert their masculinity compared to the men that were shown a standard gift card.

Men, thought to be less sensitive than women, are more sensitive than they seem, where they are constantly on the lookout to avoid situations where their masculinity may be in danger.

      • I omitted "though" because it really was not needed. You can remove either "actually" or "much." Both of them are not needed, one can do the job, or neither could work as well. So, I removed "much."; Men, though thought to be less sensitive than women, are actually much more sensitive than they seem, where they are constantly on the lookout to avoid situations where their masculinity may be in danger.

Therefore, pro-environmental marketers should develop masculine eco-friendly activities that will allow a man to contribute without endangering his manliness.

      • I simply changed "as to" to "that will" to give it a smoother sound.; Therefore, pro-environmental marketers should develop masculine eco-friendly activities as to allow a man to contribute without endangering his manliness.

SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/men-resist-green-behavior-as-unmanly/ Edited by Michael Morrow


Perception of Femininity and its Effect on Actions

Women are more environmentally-friendly people compared to men, which means they litter less and recycle more, and it has been thought that this behavior was caused by women's firm belief in altruism. However, recent studies have shown that men shun eco-friendly actions as it may negatively affect their masculinity. In the research with over 2,000 participants from both genders, results have shown that both sexes viewed a person who brought a reusable canvas bag than a plastic bag to be more feminine regardless of the person's actual gender. In another experiment, the participants felt more feminine when they recalled an experience in which they had performed an eco-friendly deed. According to a study, men were given a pink gift card with a floral pattern and were asked to imagine what they would buy with it, and the data reported that the men showed the pink card would imagine themselves buying non-green products as to reassert their masculinity compared to the men that were shown a standard gift card. Men, thought to be less sensitive than women, are more sensitive than they seem, where they are constantly on the lookout to avoid situations where their masculinity may be in danger. Therefore, pro-environmental marketers should develop masculine eco-friendly activities that will allow a man to contribute without endangering his manliness.

SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/men-resist-green-behavior-as-unmanly/




The History of the Swastika

The swastika is a figure shaped like an X with sticks at the end of each leg bending to the right at 90 degrees.

At first, it was a symbol representing well-being and used in Buddhism and Hinduism.

      • In this sentence, I changed "for" to "representing." And I decided that these two could be combined because the second one really was not standing own its own.; At first, it was a symbol for well-being.It was used in Buddhism and Hinduism.

Then, the symbol was used by Adolf Hitler and the Nazi Party in Germany.

      • Here, I combined the sentences here also. Since the sentences are short, some cant really be own their own.; Then, the symbol was used by Adolf Hitler.It was used to represent the Nazi forces of Germany.

Ever since then, the symbol has been corrupted and was not used to invoke well-being.

SOURCE: https://www.britannica.com/story/how-the-symbolism-of-the-swastika-was-ruined Edited by Michael Morrow

Consider revising this passage with longer sentences.


The History of the Swastika

The swastika is a figure shaped like an X with sticks at the end of each leg bending to the right at 90 degrees. At first, it was a symbol representing well-being and used in Buddhism and Hinduism. Then, the symbol was used by Adolf Hitler and the Nazi Party in Germany. Ever since then, the symbol has been corrupted and was not used to invoke well-being.

SOURCE: https://www.britannica.com/story/how-the-symbolism-of-the-swastika-was-ruined




Repetitive Sounds can be Music to Your Ears

Music includes a lot of repetition of lyrics, but recent studies show that repetition of any sound could be melodious.

A team of psychologists, at the University of California, collected around 20 different environmental sounds, like dripping water.

      • So I made a couple of changes. I added commas to enclose "at the University of California" and changed "in" to "at." I omitted "had" because "collected" does the job. I removed "sounds" and changed the word order at the end of the sentence.; A team of psychologists in the University of California had collected around 20 different environmental sounds, sounds like water dripping.

Then, they had played it twice: first, individually and then, in a series with increasing repeats.

      • I added commas behind the transitional phrases and placed a comma behind "twice" to give the rest of the sentence a list structure.; Then they had played it twice, first individually and then in a series with increasing repeats.

The team had found that as the repeats start to increase, the sounds became more tuneful.

The conclusion was that repetition had affected not only speech but any sound in its ability to make a sound seem good.

      • The repetition of sound could easily confuse readers. So, I changed the second one to "seem."; The conclusion was that repetition had affected not only speech but any sound in its ability to make a sound sound good.

The experiment raises the question that how and why does this happen, as the sound itself does not change, only the interpretation made by the mind.

SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/podcast/episode/repetitive-sounds-are-music-to-the-brain/ Edited by Michael Morrow


Repetitive Sounds can be Music to Your Ears

Music includes a lot of repetition of lyrics, but recent studies show that repetition of any sound could be melodious. A team of psychologists, at the University of California, collected around 20 different environmental sounds, like dripping water. Then, they had played it twice: first, individually and then, in a series with increasing repeats. The team had found that as the repeats start to increase, the sounds became more tuneful. The conclusion was that repetition had affected not only speech but any sound in its ability to make a sound seem good. The experiment raises the question that how and why does this happen, as the sound itself does not change, only the interpretation made by the mind.

SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/podcast/episode/repetitive-sounds-are-music-to-the-brain/



Intelligent People Likely to be Diagnosed with Mental Disorder

      • In the title, I fixed it to sound smoother. I don't think "Mentally Disordered" is a phrase, so I went with "diagnosed."; Intelligent People are More Likely to be Mentally Disordered

Highly intelligent people have been shown to do well in life, for example, in school or on the job.

      • THere should be a little more detail here. What do you mean by "do well in life?" Make more money? Or have happier lives? I went into the article to find that missing piece; Highly intelligent people have been shown to do well in life.

However, in an experiment done by Ruth Karpinski and her colleagues, it was shown that Mensa, a group of highly intelligent people, had more mental disorders than the general population.

This is theorized due to the brain/hyper body theory, a theory proposing that hyper-intelligence is associated with psychological and physiological overexcitabilities, or OEs, a stronger reaction to an environmental threat or insult.

      • I removed a few words to try to shorten the sentence. Also, I added a hyphen between "hyper" and "intelligence."; This is theorized to be because of brain/hyper body theory, a theory proposing that hyper intelligence is associated with psychological and physiological overexcitabilities or OEs, a stronger reaction to an environmental threat or insult.

For example, an intelligent worker may overreact to a negative comment by his superior, imagining multiple negative futures, which may trigger the body's stress response and possibly increase their anxiety.

      • Just to drop that last "which," I used "and possibly." This made me change "increased" to present tense. And I replaced "the person's" with "their."; For example, an intelligent worker may overreact to a negative comment by his superior, imagining multiple negative futures, which may trigger the body's stress response, which increases the person's anxiety.

Despite the correlation between IQ and mental disorders, the fact that either is the cause of the other has not been proved.

      • Here, I just removed "though" because it really was not needed.; Though, despite the correlation between IQ and mental disorders, the fact that either is the cause of the other has not been proved.

If researched properly, results may answer questions on how to improve people's mental and physical states.

SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/bad-news-for-the-highly-intelligent/ Edited by Michael Morrow

Try to avoid repeating words multiple times in the sentence and be more specific.


Intelligent People Likely to be Diagnosed with Mental Disorder

Highly intelligent people have been shown to do well in life, for example, in school or on the job. However, in an experiment done by Ruth Karpinski and her colleagues, it was shown that Mensa, a group of highly intelligent people, had more mental disorders than the general population. This is theorized due to the brain/hyper body theory, a theory proposing that hyper-intelligence is associated with psychological and physiological overexcitabilities, or OEs, a stronger reaction to an environmental threat or insult. For example, an intelligent worker may overreact to a negative comment by his superior, imagining multiple negative futures, which may trigger the body's stress response and possibly increase their anxiety. Despite the correlation between IQ and mental disorders, the fact that either is the cause of the other has not been proved. If researched properly, results may answer questions on how to improve people's mental and physical states.

SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/bad-news-for-the-highly-intelligent/



The Decline of Science

Recently, the Trump administration has banned US public health agencies from using the following terms: vulnerable, entitlement, diversity, transgender, fetus, evidence-based, and science-based.

Agencies were outraged by this ban as the ban challenges the definition of science which is describing the material world with evidence.

      • I removed the two dashes and put in a basic "which is." I know there are multiple definitions of science, but would this one be better if it said "defining" instead of "describing?"; Agencies were outraged by this ban as the ban challenges the definition of science--describing the material world with evidence.

Following the ban are the guaranteed loss of life due to the inability to maintain effective public health measures.

      • In this sentence, I corrected some phrasing and "jazzed" it up some. The comma was dropped. "Loss of some lives" is now "loss of life." "Have" is now "maintain."; Following the ban are the guaranteed loss of some lives, a result of the inability to have effective public health measures.

By nature, humans prefer the ideal choice such as the "magic cure".

      • I moved "by nature" to the start of the sentence. Overall, the sentence does not make sense. I'm cant draw from previous info given to help understand. I think you should really go into detail on what this "magic cure" is.; Humans, by nature, prefer the nicer, more ideal choice and as such prefer the "magic cure".

With health agencies being unable to accurately recommend and create an effective public health measure, people will die due to people choosing to go after the "magic cure."

If this ban continues, the death of many is inevitable.

SOURCE: https://blogs.scientificamerican.com/observations/trump-to-cdc-these-7-words-are-now-forbidden/ Edited by Michael Morrow


The Decline of Science

Recently, the Trump administration has banned US public health agencies from using the following terms: vulnerable, entitlement, diversity, transgender, fetus, evidence-based, and science-based. Agencies were outraged by this ban as the ban challenges the definition of science which is describing the material world with evidence. Following the ban are the guaranteed loss of life due to the inability to maintain effective public health measures. By nature, humans prefer the ideal choice such as the "magic cure". With health agencies being unable to accurately recommend and create an effective public health measure, people will die due to people choosing to go after the "magic cure." If this ban continues, the death of many is inevitable.

SOURCE: https://blogs.scientificamerican.com/observations/trump-to-cdc-these-7-words-are-now-forbidden/





Why the Brain is Better Than A Smartphone

Nowadays, people rely too much on their smartphones rather than their brain, Googling the answer to every question, but the brain will remain superior to smartphones.

      • Edited for clarity; Nowadays, people rely on their smartphones rather than their brains, Googling the answer to every question, but the brain will remain superior to smartphones.

For one, people do remember some details like spelling and how to use the gadget in the first place, otherwise how else would they Google?

      • Edited for fluidity; For one, people do remember some essential details like spelling and how to use their smartphone in the first place. Otherwise, how would they Google?

Secondly, to function in society, one must have a basic understanding of culture and knowledge about their friends such as the name or birthday.

      • Edited for grammar; Secondly, to function in society one must have a basic understanding of culture and knowledge, such as the names or birthdays of their friends.

Also, our brains are necessary to remember passcodes and the such.

      • Edited for grammar; Also, our brains are necessary to remember passcodes and the like.

Lastly, productivity would be interrupted by continuously looking up information. As such, the brain is irreplaceable.

      • Edited for clarity; Lastly, productivity would be interrupted by having to continuously look up information. As such, the brain is irreplaceable.

Why the Brain is Better Than A Smartphone

Nowadays, people rely too much on their smartphones rather than their brain, Googling the answer to every question, but the brain will remain superior to smartphones.

For one, people do remember some details like spelling and how to use the gadget in the first place, otherwise how else would they Google?

Secondly, to function in society, one must have a basic understanding of culture and knowledge about their friends such as the name or birthday.

Also, our brains are necessary to remember passcodes and the such.

Lastly, productivity would be interrupted by continuously looking up information. As such, the brain is irreplaceable.

Fully Edited Article: Why the Brain is Better Than A Smartphone

Nowadays, people rely on their smartphones rather than their brains, Googling the answer to every question, but the brain will remain superior to smartphones. For one, people do remember some essential details like spelling and how to use their smartphone in the first place. Otherwise, how would they Google? Secondly, to function in society one must have a basic understanding of culture and knowledge, such as the names or birthdays of their friends. Also, our brains are necessary to remember passcodes and the like. Lastly, productivity would be interrupted by having to continuously look up information. As such, the brain is irreplaceable.

      • You need to work on making sure that you connect your sentences properly. You've got all of the information here that you need, now you need to focus on phrasing. Think about how each sentence connects to each other and how they serve the paragraph as a whole.

Edited by Laurel Copes

Source: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/pogue-6-reasons-why-smartphones-wont-replace-our-brains/




Video Game for ADHD

A video game produced by Akili Interactive Labs has been shown to treat ADHD patients. The game sends its player to multiple fantasy worlds and, upon completion of a task, rewards the player with stars and points. The game targets central neurological neurons that control attention and impulsive behavior and activates certain neural networks. In an experiment with 348 children of ages 8 to 12, children who played the video game for over four years showed better results compared to children who played another game as a placebo. To get the best results, the researchers recommend using it for 30 minutes a day, five days a week, for up to four weeks. The game, however, has not been tested against psychotherapy or the sort and, thus, cannot be seen as its equal or superior. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/this-video-game-may-help-kids-with-adhd/



The Joy In Music Compositions


Songs evoke happiness or sadness, anger or despair, or positive or negative emotions. But how is this feat accomplished?

      • Edited for grammar; Songs can evoke happiness or sadness, anger or despair, and other positive and negative emotions. But how is this feat accomplished?

Scientists have performed a study on music compositions to determine what factor a song plays in emotion.

      • Edited for fluidity; Scientists have performed a study on music compositions to determine what factor listening to a song plays on emotion.

They did this by using labMT to analyze words and whether it brings out positive or negative emotions.

      • Edited for fluidity; They did this by using labMT to analyze whether or not various words in songs bring out positive or negative emotions.

They, then, had corresponded the positive words with the notes. The conclusion was that major and seventh chords had a high correlation with positive feelings.

      • Edited for grammar; They then found which notes the positive words corresponded to in the music. The conclusion was that major and seventh chords had a high correlation with positive feelings.

The Joy In Music Compositions

Songs evoke happiness or sadness, anger or despair, or positive or negative emotions. But how is this feat accomplished? Scientists have performed a study on music compositions to determine what factor a song plays in emotion. They did this by using labMT to analyze words and whether it brings out positive or negative emotions. They, then, had corresponded the positive words with the notes. The conclusion was that major and seventh chords had a high correlation with positive feelings.

Fully Edited Article: Songs can evoke happiness or sadness, anger or despair, and other positive and negative emotions. But how is this feat accomplished? Scientists have performed a study on music compositions to determine what factor listening to a song plays on emotion. They did this by using labMT to analyze whether or not various words in songs bring out positive or negative emotions. They then found which notes the positive words corresponded to in the music. The conclusion was that major and seventh chords had a high correlation with positive feelings.

      • You need to work on grammar and sentence structure.

Edited by Laurel Copes

Source: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/have-scientists-found-a-secret-chord-for-happy-songs/






History of the 'Pledge of Allegiance'

The Pledge of Allegiance, which, in most cases, is executed in American schools daily, has been slightly altered from its original form over the years.

      • Using two adverbs so close together like that is awkward, add the “over the years” part to make sure your reader knows it’s not a recent alteration; The Pledge of Allegiance, commonly executed in American schools daily, had been slightly altered from its original form.

Written in August 1892 by Francis Bellamy, the pledge first read "I pledge allegiance to my Flag and the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all."

Gradually, changes to the pledge were made.

      • I would like to know WHY the changes were made – I feel that including this information would make your summary stronger.

In 1923, the pledge read "I pledge allegiance to the Flag of the United States of America and to the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all."

Then, in 1954, it became "I pledge allegiance to the flag of the United States of America, and to the republic for which it stands, one nation under God, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all."

The pledge, though changed throughout history, still brought forth feelings of patriotism.

      • This summary is grammatically pretty good, but I recommend adding some reasoning behind why the pledge kept changing over the years

History of the 'Pledge of Allegiance'

The Pledge of Allegiance, which, in most cases, is executed in American schools daily, has been slightly altered from its original form over the years. Written in August 1892 by Francis Bellamy, the pledge first read "I pledge allegiance to my Flag and the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." Gradually, changes to the pledge were made. In 1923, the pledge read "I pledge allegiance to the Flag of the United States of America and to the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." Then, in 1954, it became "I pledge allegiance to the flag of the United States of America, and to the republic for which it stands, one nation under God, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." The pledge, though changed throughout history, still brought forth feelings of patriotism.



History of the 'Pledge of Allegiance'

The Pledge of Allegiance, commonly executed in American schools daily, had been slightly altered from its original form. Written in August 1892 by Francis Bellamy, the pledge first read "I pledge allegiance to my Flag and the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." Gradually, changes to the pledge were made. In 1923, the pledge read "I pledge allegiance to the Flag of the United States of America and to the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." Then, in 1954, it became "I pledge allegiance to the flag of the United States of America, and to the republic for which it stands, one nation under God, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." The pledge, though changed throughout history, still brought forth feelings of patriotism. SOURCE: http://www.ushistory.org/documents/pledge.htm



A Possible New Way of Curing Obesity

Obesity may be "curable" with the injection of a protein.

Scientists have discovered that a protein called GDF15 can be abundantly found in lean animals more than it can be found in fatter creatures.

      • Sentence structure; Scientists have found that in many lean creatures a protein called GDF15 can be abundantly found as in comparison to fatter creatures.

Scientists have injected this protein into fatter creatures, which slimmed them down without any side-effects.

      • Passive voice, comma; Scientists have tried to inject this protein into fatter creatures which had slimmed them down without any side-effects.

In addition, after taking the injection, animals have been seen to prefer a low-fat diet.

As this protein has worked on animals, scientists are optimistic to test on humans.

However, the safety of doing so is murky.

      • EXPAND***

A Possible New Way of Curing Obesity

Obesity may be "curable" with the injection of a protein. Scientists have discovered that a protein called GDF15 can be abundantly found in lean animals more than it can be found in fatter creatures. Scientists have injected this protein into fatter creatures, which slimmed them down without any side-effects. In addition, after taking the injection, animals have been seen to prefer a low-fat diet. As this protein has worked on animals, scientists are optimistic to test on humans. However, the safety of doing so is murky.


A Possible New Way of Curing Obesity

Obesity may be "curable" with the injection of a protein. Scientists have found that in many lean creatures a protein called GDF15 can be abundantly found as in comparison to fatter creatures. Scientists have tried to inject this protein into fatter creatures which had slimmed them down without any side-effects. In addition, after taking the injection, animals have been seen to prefer a low-fat diet. As this protein has worked on animals, scientists are optimistic to test on humans. However, the safety of doing so is murky. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/scientists-zero-in-on-a-new-target-for-obesity/


Talking on the Phone Makes People Selectively Attentive While Driving

      • Avoid ambiguous ‘you,’ ‘attent’ is not a word, make the title actually connect to the article; Phone Addiction Will Make You Selectively Attent

Every day, people are always talking on their smartphones.

      • Comma, wrong “everyday/every day”, pluralize smartphone because you’re talking about plural people, relate it more specifically to the rest of the article; Everyday people are always looking at their smartphone.

A recent study, proven by older experiments, has shown that being glued to your smartphone will make you miss a lot of information.

      • Subject/verb agreement; A recent study, proven by older experiments, have shown that being glued to your smartphone will make you miss many information.

For example, talking on the phone while driving causes drivers to ignore hazard signs, because when people talk on the phone, they visualize the other person’s environment and actions.

      • Sentence structure, avoid ambiguous “you”, avoid passive voice avoid “etc.” lists; For example, calling while driving will make you ignore hazard signs because when you are calling someone you are visualizing his or her environment, actions, and so on.

This visual component taps into resources needed for accurate visual perception, which makes the driver miss out on details such as stop signs and speed limit signs.

      • Avoid ambiguous “you”, avoid “etc.” lists; This visual component taps into resources needed for accurate visual perception, and then you'll miss out on stop signs, speed limit signs, and so on.

This is proven by the “invisible gorilla” experiment, which shows that while an observer is trying to count the amount of passes a group makes in a basketball game, they will not notice a gorilla walk by, because they draw upon resources to count the basketball passes, ignoring other visuals.

      • Be more specific in your description of the experiment, avoid ambiguous “you”; This can be proven by the "invisible gorilla" experiment as while you are trying to count the amount of passes a group makes, you will not notice the gorilla walk by because you are drawing upon resources to accurately count the basketball pass, ignoring on other visuals.

This can be related to phone calls and distracted driving; because the driver is distracted, they have a higher likelihood to get into an accident.

      • Make the concluding sentence wrap up the rest of the article – since eye problems was not mentioned, don’t include it right at the end; Not only will phones cause you eye problems, but they will also have a tendency to get into multiple accidents.


Talking on the Phone Makes People Selectively Attentive While Driving

Every day, people are always talking on their smartphones. A recent study, proven by older experiments, has shown that being glued to your smartphone will make you miss a lot of information. For example, talking on the phone while driving causes drivers to ignore hazard signs, because when people talk on the phone, they visualize the other person’s environment and actions. This visual component taps into resources needed for accurate visual perception, which makes the driver miss out on details such as stop signs and speed limit signs. This is proven by the “invisible gorilla” experiment, which shows that while an observer is trying to count the amount of passes a group makes in a basketball game, they will not notice a gorilla walk by, because they draw upon resources to count the basketball passes, ignoring other visuals. This can be related to phone calls and distracted driving; because the driver is distracted, they have a higher likelihood to get into an accident.


Phone Addiction Will Make You Selectively Attent

Everyday people are always looking at their smartphone. A recent study, proven by older experiments, have shown that being glued to your smartphone will make you miss many information. For example, calling while driving will make you ignore hazard signs because when you are calling someone you are visualizing his or her environment, actions, and so on. This visual component taps into resources needed for accurate visual perception, and then you'll miss out on stop signs, speed limit signs, and so on. This can be proven by the "invisible gorilla" experiment as while you are trying to count the amount of passes a group makes, you will not notice the gorilla walk by because you are drawing upon resources to accurately count the basketball pass, ignoring on other visuals. Not only will phones cause you eye problems, but they will also have a tendency to get into multiple accidents. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/5-vital-things-you-cant-do-properly-when-youre-on-your-phone/



Correlation Between Sleeve Length and Hospital Infections

      • this article summary isn’t about doctors, it’s about sleeve length; Beware of Doctors

Every day, people attend their biannual health checkups to find out if there are any anomalies in their health.

      • Comma, be more specific in your description; Everyday people attend their biannual health checkups for any anomalies.

However, it has recently been shown that doctors, too, are a source of infections.

      • Order of words for flow, commas; However, recently it has been shown that doctors too are a source of infections.

A study, with 34 health care workers participating, required its participants to examine a mannequin for a "cauliflower mosaic virus" four times, twice with long sleeve and twice without.

Results show that twenty-five percent of the simulations when wearing long sleeves had the virus on their sleeves, compared to zero percent when wearing short sleeves.

Not only have they contaminated their sleeves, but about five percent of the workers who wore long sleeves had also contaminated the mannequin.

      • Comma; Not only have they contaminated their sleeves but about five percent of the workers who wore long sleeves had also contaminated the mannequin.

Despite such results, researches still have to experiment on whether or not short sleeves will have an effect on the number of infections spread in a hospital.

Correlation Between Sleeve Length and Hospital Infections

Every day, people attend their biannual health checkups to find out if there are any anomalies in their health. However, it has recently been shown that doctors, too, are a source of infections. A study, with 34 health care workers participating, required its participants to examine a mannequin for a "cauliflower mosaic virus" four times, twice with long sleeve and twice without. Results show that twenty-five percent of the simulations when wearing long sleeves had the virus on their sleeves, compared to zero percent when wearing short sleeves. Not only have they contaminated their sleeves, but about five percent of the workers who wore long sleeves had also contaminated the mannequin. Despite such results, researches still have to experiment on whether or not short sleeves will have an effect on the number of infections spread in a hospital.


Beware of Doctors

Everyday people attend their biannual health checkups for any anomalies. However, recently it has been shown that doctors too are a source of infections. A study, with 34 health care workers participating, required its participants to examine a mannequin for a "cauliflower mosaic virus" four times, twice with long sleeve and twice without. Results show that twenty-five percent of the simulations when wearing long sleeves had the virus on their sleeves, compared to zero percent when wearing short sleeves. Not only have they contaminated their sleeves but about five percent of the workers who wore long sleeves had also contaminated the mannequin. Despite such results, researches still have to experiment on whether or not short sleeves will have an effect on the number of infections spread in a hospital. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/long-sleeves-on-doctors-white-coats-may-spread-germs/


The Difference Between Critical Thinking and Intelligence

      • title doesn’t match the tone of the article; Intelligence Versus Critical Thinking

Intelligent people might do dumb things from time to time.

Intelligence, which is typically measure by IQ, is different from critical thinking; the latter is the ability to think rationally, and the former is the ability to memorize various things, such as equations and vocabulary.

      • Wording and sentence structure – avoid run-ons with clever punctuation, also avoid an “etc.”-like ending of a sentence; Intelligence, typically measured in IQ, is different from critical thinking as the latter is the ability to think rationally and the former is the ability to memorize equations, vocabulary, and so on.

Intelligent people are often assumed to be successful in life, but that is not always the case.

      • Verb choice, add “always” to avoid making a generalization; Intelligent people are often mistook to be successful in life, however that is not the case.

According to a study performed by Professor Heather A. Butler, critical thinkers experience fewer negative life events, such as having and forgetting an exam.

      • Capitalize titles, verb tense, avoid “etc.”-like lists; According to a study performed by professor Heather A. Butler, critical thinkers experienced fewer negative life events such as having debt, forgetting an exam, and so on.

Not only is critical thinking a significant skill for the future, but it can also be improved if lacking, whereas intelligence is mainly predetermined by genetics.

      • Comma, “PREdominantly PREdeteremined” is odd diction; Not only is critical thinking a significant skill for the future but it can also be improved if lacking, whereas intelligence is predominantly predetermined by genetics.

Therefore, critical think is just as, if not more, important than intelligence.

      • Order of wording; Critical thinking, therefore, is as, if not more, important than intelligence\


The Difference Between Critical Thinking and Intelligence

Intelligent people might do dumb things from time to time. Intelligence, which is typically measure by IQ, is different from critical thinking; the latter is the ability to think rationally, and the former is the ability to memorize various things, such as equations and vocabulary. Intelligent people are often assumed to be successful in life, but that is not always the case. According to a study performed by Professor Heather A. Butler, critical thinkers experience fewer negative life events, such as having and forgetting an exam. Not only is critical thinking a significant skill for the future, but it can also be improved if lacking, whereas intelligence is mainly predetermined by genetics. Therefore, critical think is just as, if not more, important than intelligence.


Intelligence Versus Critical Thinking

Intelligent people might do dumb things from time to time. Intelligence, typically measured in IQ, is different from critical thinking as the latter is the ability to think rationally and the former is the ability to memorize equations, vocabulary, and so on. Intelligent people are often mistook to be successful in life, however that is not the case. According to a study performed by professor Heather A. Butler, critical thinkers experienced fewer negative life events such as having debt, forgetting an exam, and so on. Not only is critical thinking a significant skill for the future but it can also be improved if lacking, whereas intelligence is predominantly predetermined by genetics. Critical thinking, therefore, is as, if not more, important than intelligence. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/why-do-smart-people-do-foolish-things/


High Risk of Baldness for Short People

Men who are shorter may have a higher risk of premature hair loss.

An international study of over 200,000 men's genetics was conducted by leadership of the University of Bonn.

Results show that premature hair loss is linked with other illnesses and diseases.

In the study, researchers identified 63 changes in the human chromosome, including a chromosome for short height.

      • Passive voice, wording; In the study, researchers had identified 63 changes in the human chromosome, one of which was short height.

However, premature hair loss only signals increased risk of getting illnesses, therefore short height does not result in an inevitable premature hair loss.

Even then, there is a high change that short people may have premature hair loss.


High Risk of Baldness for Short People

Men who are shorter may have a higher risk of premature hair loss. An international study of over 200,000 men's genetics was conducted by leadership of the University of Bonn. Results show that premature hair loss is linked with other illnesses and diseases. In the study, researchers identified 63 changes in the human chromosome, including a chromosome for short height. However, premature hair loss only signals increased risk of getting illnesses, therefore short height does not result in an inevitable premature hair loss. Even then, there is a high change that short people may have premature hair loss.


High Risk of Baldness for Short People

Men who are shorter may have a higher risk of premature hair loss. An international study of over 200,000 men's genetics was conducted by leadership of the University of Bonn. Results show that premature hair loss is linked with other illnesses and diseases. In the study, researchers had identified 63 changes in the human chromosome, one of which was short height. However, premature hair loss only signals increased risk of getting illnesses, therefore short height does not result in an inevitable premature hair loss. Even then, there is a high change that short people may have premature hair loss. SOURCE: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2017/03/170308084034.htm