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UPDATE: November 30th, 2017 You thought I was gone? You thought wrong! It's everyday bro! Starting from December 1st, I will type up daily articles summaries. Hope to keep you updated!

Google AI teaches itself how to walk, run, and jump

Eddie Perez 7/17/17

Artificial Intelligence (AI) has been on the rise for the past few years, but there have been few successful attempts on creating a program that can teach itself. Well, Google has made its own artificial intelligence program that can teach itself how to walk. The program ran on 4 legs and 2 legs, and the program seemed to learn little by little on how to run through every course it was given. Although the program had some failures when running throughout the courses, the programs always learned from its mistakes. If this program really learned how to walk all by itself in a matter of days, then who knows how artificial intelligence will roam in the future.

Source: http://metro.co.uk/2017/07/17/beware-googles-ai-is-so-smart-it-just-taught-itself-to-walk-without-any-human-help-6786514/

Google AI Teaches Itself To Walk, Run, and Jump

      • Always capitalize the first letter of every word in the title of the article
Google AI teaches itself how to walk, run, and jump

Aneesha Roy 8/3/2017

Google has created its own artificial intelligence program that can teach itself to walk.

      • I have changed up the order of the sentences in the student's article, because I felt sentence 2 is more in line with the Article Title. Also, I began by eliminating the word 'Well', present in sentence 2 of Student's original article, because it makes the sentence sound like an inference rather than a statement, and the Topic Sentence in an article should be a statement, rather than inference.; Well, Google has made its own artificial Although the program ran throughout the course with its arms flailing out and its body completely unstable, it was still impressive.intelligence program that can teach itself how to walk.

Though Artificial Intelligence (AI) has been on the rise for the past few years, yet there have only been few successful attempts at creating a program that can teach itself.

      • I have begun this sentence with 'Though' and added 'yet' later, to make the transition smoother. Also, I have replaced 'on' with 'at', because the former was a prepositional error.; Artificial Intelligence (AI) has been on the rise for the past few years, but there have been few successful attempts on creating a program that can teach itself.

Despite running throughout the course with its arms flailing out and body completely unstable, Google's artificial intelligence program was impressive.

      • I have changed up the order of the sentence and used the word 'Despite' to begin the sentence, to make it sound more organic and grammatically continuous.; Although the program ran throughout the course with its arms flailing out and its body completely unstable, it was still impressive.

The program ran on four and two legs, gradually learning how to run through every course it was given.

      • I have shortened the sentence to make it sound less clumsy.; The program ran on 4 legs and 2 legs, and the program seemed to learn little by little on how to run through every course it was given.

Although the program experienced some failures while running throughout its courses, it always learned from its mistakes.

      • I have eliminated the erroneously used plural 'programs' from the original sentence, and shortened this sentence slightly, to make it sound tighter.; Although the program had some failures when running throughout the courses, the programs always learned from its mistakes.

If Google's artificial intelligence program could learn how to walk, all by itself, in just a matter of days, who knows what the future of artificial intelligence is going to be?

      • I reintroduced the terms 'Google's artificial intelligence' to sum up the article better, by bringing back these words from the topic sentence.; If this program really learned how to walk all by itself in a matter of days, then who knows how artificial intelligence will roam in the future.

Source: http://metro.co.uk/2017/07/17/beware-googles-ai-is-so-smart-it-just-taught-itself-to-walk-without-any-human-help-6786514/


Google AI Teaches Itself To Walk, Run, and Jump

Google has created its own artificial intelligence program that can teach itself to walk. Though Artificial Intelligence (AI) has been on the rise for the past few years, yet there have only been few successful attempts at creating a program that can teach itself. Despite running throughout the course with its arms flailing out and body completely unstable, Google's artificial intelligence program was impressive. The program ran on four and two legs, gradually learning how to run through every course it was given. Although the program experienced some failures while running throughout its courses, it always learned from its mistakes. If Google's artificial intelligence program could learn how to walk, all by itself, in just a matter of days, who knows what the future of artificial intelligence is going to be?

Source: http://metro.co.uk/2017/07/17/beware-googles-ai-is-so-smart-it-just-taught-itself-to-walk-without-any-human-help-6786514/











Reports say that big streaming service SoundCloud has funding to survive for only another 50 days

Eddie Perez 7/15/17

SoundCloud is one of my personal favorite apps on my home screen due to the fact that it’s simple to use and it has all my music I ever listen to in one giant playlist. But a TechCrunch report recently stated that Soundcloud only has enough money to continue the streaming service for another 50 days. SoundCloud rejected the leaked statistic and stated that they are “fully funded into quarter 4.” Although SoundCloud denied the TechCrunch report, they did say that they were looking for potential investors for the music streaming service, further proving the claim made by TechCrunch. SoundCloud has also reportedly cut 40% of its work force, which still focuses the company into bankruptcy. The plethora of music that is in my playlist at the moment will soon vanish, so I believe that it’s best to say farewell to Souncloud as it dies and say hello to Spotify.

Source: http://www.businessinsider.com/soundcloud-only-enough-funding-last-50-days-reports-2017-7

Reports Say SoundCloud Is Alive For Just Another Fifty Days

      • I have capitalized the first letter of every word in the Article Title and also shortened it to make it sound catchier.
Reports say that big streaming service SoundCloud has funding to survive for only another 50 days

Aneesha Roy 8/04/2017

SoundCloud is one of my favorite home screen apps because it is simple to use and can accommodate all the music I could ever want to listen to, in one giant playlist.

      • I have shortened student's original sentence and corrected grammatical errors in it to create concision and brevity.; SoundCloud is one of my personal favorite apps on my home screen due to the fact that it’s simple to use and it has all my music I ever listen to in one giant playlist.

A recent TechCrunch report states that SoundCloud has just enough funds to continue its music streaming service for another fifty days.

      • I have shortened student's original sentence by eliminating unnecessary words to aid readability and enhance comprehension.; But a TechCrunch report recently stated that Soundcloud only has enough money to continue the streaming service for another 50 days.

SoundCloud has strongly denied the leaked statistic, stating that they are "fully funded into quarter 4".

      • I have corrected grammar usage by replacing 'rejected' with 'denied'.; SoundCloud rejected the leaked statistic and stated that they are “fully funded into quarter 4.”

Though SoundCloud rejected TechCrunch's report, it admitted to be looking for potential investors for continuing its independent music streaming service.

      • I have shortened student's original sentence shortly, to keep the passage brief and easy to follow.; Although SoundCloud denied the TechCrunch report, they did say that they were looking for potential investors for the music streaming service, further proving the claim made by TechCrunch.

SoundCloud has reportedly laid off 40% of its workforce and may soon have run its course as an independent music streaming service.

      • I have rephrased student's original sentence utilizing other facts present in the original passage to sum things up smoothly.; SoundCloud has also reportedly cut 40% of its work force, which still focuses the company into bankruptcy.

Since my favorite home screen app may soon become nonexistent and I might lose all the music on my SoundCloud playlist, I look forward to bidding SoundCloud goodbye and welcoming Spotify.

      • I have slightly lengthened student's original sentence to make it sound more conclusive.; The plethora of music that is in my playlist at the moment will soon vanish, so I believe that it’s best to say farewell to Souncloud as it dies and say hello to Spotify.

Source: http://www.businessinsider.com/soundcloud-only-enough-funding-last-50-days-reports-2017-7


Reports Say SoundCloud Is Alive For Just Another Fifty Days

SoundCloud is one of my favorite home screen apps because it is simple to use and can accommodate all the music I could ever want to listen to, in one giant playlist. A recent TechCrunch report states that SoundCloud has just enough funds to continue its music streaming service for another fifty days. SoundCloud has strongly denied the leaked statistic, stating that they are "fully funded into quarter 4". Though SoundCloud rejected TechCrunch's report, it admitted to be looking for potential investors for continuing its independent music streaming service. SoundCloud has reportedly laid off 40% of its workforce and may soon have run its course as an independent music streaming service. Since my favorite home screen app may soon become nonexistent and I might lose all the music on my SoundCloud playlist, I look forward to bidding SoundCloud goodbye and welcoming Spotify.

Source: http://www.businessinsider.com/soundcloud-only-enough-funding-last-50-days-reports-2017-7












Going to Mars will not be as easy as we thought

Eddie Perez 7/14/17

We all know that Earth is our home and will always be our home, and we've colonized most of the planet already, so it's only natural that us human beings find other places to colonize besides planet Earth. For many years, Mars was a huge candidate for colonization due to the fact that it was the only other planet in our solar system that wouldn't boil us or freeze us to death. For many years now, NASA told the public that the first mission to Mars will be on the year 2030. Now, NASA admits that they don't have enough funding to put humans on Mars. Although this doesn't mean that the mission to Mars is completely canceled, that just means that the mission will be delayed until they receive more support with funding the mission. With the delaying of the Mars mission, that opens doors for another moon mission, but either way, we aren't going to see people on Mars anytime soon.

Source: http://nypost.com/2017/07/14/nasa-admits-they-dont-have-the-money-to-get-to-mars/

Mission To Mars Is Farther Away Than We Thought

      • I have capitalized necessary letters and added more words to student's original article title to enhance understanding of the passage that is to follow.
Going to Mars will not be as easy as we thought

Aneesha Roy 8/04/2017

Though Earth is our natural home, increasing population and man's never-ending colonization of its resources has made it inevitable to look for other places and planets to inhabit.

      • I have lengthened student's original topic sentence to provide more context and aid comprehension.; We all know that Earth is our home and will always be our home, and we've colonized most of the planet already, so it's only natural that us human beings find other places to colonize besides planet Earth.

For many years, Mars was considered the most suitable candidate in the Solar System for human habitation, not just due to proximity, but also because it was the only planet that had the optimum temperature to sustain human life.

      • I have rephrased student's original sentence to provide more ambient context regarding the subject matter.; For many years, Mars was a huge candidate for colonization due to the fact that it was the only other planet in our solar system that wouldn't boil us or freeze us to death.

NASA has been telling people, the world over, that the first mission to Mars will be launched in the year, 2030.

      • I have changed up the order of words in student's original sentence to aid readability and correct grammatical errors.; For many years now, NASA told the public that the first mission to Mars will be on the year 2030.

However now, NASA has admitted that it does not possess enough funds to put humans on Mars.

      • I have changed a few words in student's original sentence to keep the narrative tight.; Now, NASA admits that they don't have enough funding to put humans on Mars.

Though this does not mean that the mission to Mars is cancelled forever, it does mean that the mission is delayed till NASA receives enough funds to support the Mars mission.

      • I have changed up a few words to smoothen the transition towards the conclusion.; Although this doesn't mean that the mission to Mars is completely canceled, that just means that the mission will be delayed until they receive more support with funding the mission.

The delay of the Mars mission has opened doors for another moon mission, however that too will be expensive; either way, mission to Mars is farther away than we thought.

      • I have lengthened student's concluding sentence and summed up using facts mentioned in the original article.; With the delaying of the Mars mission, that opens doors for another moon mission, but either way, we aren't going to see people on Mars anytime soon.

Source: http://nypost.com/2017/07/14/nasa-admits-they-dont-have-the-money-to-get-to-mars/


Mission To Mars Is Farther Away Than We Thought

Though Earth is our natural home, increasing population and man's never-ending colonization of its resources has made it inevitable to look for other places and planets to inhabit. For many years, Mars was considered the most suitable candidate in the Solar System for human habitation, not just due to proximity, but also because it was the only planet that had the optimum temperature to sustain human life. NASA has been telling people, the world over, that the first mission to Mars will be launched in the year, 2030. However now, NASA has admitted that it does not possess enough funds to put humans on Mars. Though this does not mean that the mission to Mars is cancelled forever, it does mean that the mission is delayed till NASA receives enough funds to support the Mars mission. The delay of the Mars mission has opened doors for another moon mission, however that too will be expensive; either way, mission to Mars is farther away than we thought.

Source: http://nypost.com/2017/07/14/nasa-admits-they-dont-have-the-money-to-get-to-mars/









Teleportation becomes a reality as Scientists teleport an object using Quantum Entanglement

Eddie Perez 7/13/17

Teleportation has become something that most people will consider as science fiction more than science fact. Well, a team of researchers in China has established teleportation into reality when they teleported a photon 300 miles above earth's surface. Using a process called "Quantum Entanglement," they shot a photon into the sky. Although a photon is just a tiny piece of matter that doesn't mean much at all, the science team behind the experiment believe that this out-of-laboratory experiment is going to be revolutionary because it is "an essential step toward global-scale quantum Internet." Since this is the longest distance an object has ever been teleported, this opens the opportunity for more revolutionary and extensive breakthroughs in the future. Soon, we might start relying our lives on teleportation as a new type of transportation when we try to get around places.

Source: http://time.com/4854718/quantum-entanglement-teleport-space/

Teleportation Is A Reality

      • I have capitalized necessary first letters in words and shortened student's original article title to keep things brief and interesting.
Teleportation becomes a reality as Scientists teleport an object using Quantum Entanglement

Aneesha Roy 8/04/2017

Teleportation has become a scientifically proven reality, though most people still consider it to be the stuff of science fiction.

      • I have tightened student's original topic sentence to make it punchier and less confusing,; Teleportation has become something that most people will consider as science fiction more than science fact.

A team of Chinese researchers has made teleportation a reality by successfully teleporting a photon, 300 miles above the earth's surface.

      • I introduced a comma after 'photon'.; Well, a team of researchers in China has established teleportation into reality when they teleported a photon 300 miles above earth's surface.

Using a process called "Quantum Entanglement", they shot up a photon in the sky.

      • I rectified the comma appearing within quotation marks in student's original sentence and added the preposition 'up'.; Using a process called "Quantum Entanglement," they shot a photon into the sky.

Although a photon is just a tiny piece of matter, the team of scientists who performed this experiment believe this out-of-laboratory experiment to be a gateway towards more ambitious and futuristic breakthroughs in the near future.

      • I have eliminated some words from student's original sentence to make it sound more coherent and organic.; Although a photon is just a tiny piece of matter that doesn't mean much at all, the science team behind the experiment believe that this out-of-laboratory experiment is going to be revolutionary because it is "an essential step toward global-scale quantum Internet."

Scientists further believe that since this is the longest distance an object has ever been teleported, this is an essential first step towards global-scale quantum internet.

      • I have changed student's original sentence to better channel the passage towards a well-rounded conclusion.; Since this is the longest distance an object has ever been teleported, this opens the opportunity for more revolutionary and extensive breakthroughs in the future.

Now, since teleportation is a reality, we might soon start relying on this new type of transportation to get around places, in our daily lives.

      • I have changed up the order of words in student's original sentence and also introduced new words from the article title and topic sentence, to conclude the passage better.; Soon, we might start relying our lives on teleportation as a new type of transportation when we try to get around places.

Source: http://time.com/4854718/quantum-entanglement-teleport-space/


Teleportation Is A Reality

Teleportation has become a scientifically proven reality, though most people still consider it to be the stuff of science fiction. A team of Chinese researchers has made teleportation a reality by successfully teleporting a photon, 300 miles above the earth's surface. Using a process called "Quantum Entanglement", they shot up a photon in the sky. Although a photon is just a tiny piece of matter, the team of scientists who performed this experiment believe this out-of-laboratory experiment to be a gateway towards more ambitious and futuristic breakthroughs in the near future. Scientists further believe that since this is the longest distance an object has ever been teleported, this is an essential first step towards global-scale quantum internet. Now, since teleportation is a reality, we might soon start relying on this new type of transportation to get around places, in our daily lives.

Source: http://time.com/4854718/quantum-entanglement-teleport-space/









RED announces first holographic phone ever to be made.

Eddie Perez 7/12/17

Most of us use our smartphones on a daily basis, whether it would be for calling, texting, playing games, playing music, etc. Although we have so much on our fingertips, we've always been stuck with a 2D interface. Well, Red, a company best known for creating high-end professional cameras, has created "Hydrogen One," the first holographic phone ever to be created. Although very little information was leaked about the new phone, they did say that the new holographic phone comes in aluminum ($1,195) and titanium ($1,595) and preorder is available now. Although Hydrogen One has impressed many people, there were many skeptics and disbelievers when the new phone was announced due to the fact that many analysts believe that such a breakthrough won't make such a big change to the phone industry.. Even though there are many doubters, haters, fans, and believers, this will no doubt be a massive breakthrough in the smartphone industry.

Source: http://www.bbc.com/news/technology-40527740

Red Announces First-Ever Holographic Phone

      • I have shortened student's original article title to make it sound catchy and interesting, and also capitalized the first letter of every word in it.
RED announces first holographic phone ever to be made.

Aneesha Roy 8/05/2017

Most of us use smartphones on a daily basis, whether it be for calling, texting, playing games, playing music, etc.

      • I got rid of the unnecessary pronoun 'our' and the redundant 'would' from student's original topic sentence to keep things short and simple.; Most of us use our smartphones on a daily basis, whether it would be for calling, texting, playing games, playing music, etc.

Although we have so much on our fingertips, we've always been stuck with a 2D interface.

However, Red, the company best known for its high-end professional cameras, has created "Hydrogen One", the first-ever holographic phone.

      • I have slightly shortened student's original sentence, replaced indefinite article 'a' with definite article 'the' and added 'its' to particularize and emphasize Red's ownership of 'high-end professional cameras'.; Red, a company best known for creating high-end professional cameras, has created "Hydrogen One," the first holographic phone ever to be created.

Although very little information has been leaked about the new phone, it has been revealed that it will be available in aluminum ($1,195), and titanium ($1,595), with preorder starting now.

      • I have changed some words in student's original sentence for the sake of clarity and precision.; Although very little information was leaked about the new phone, they did say that the new holographic phone comes in aluminum ($1,195) and titanium ($1,595) and preorder is available now.

Hydrogen One has impressed many people, including Red's fans, but there are still many skeptics who believe analysts' opinion that such a breakthrough, even if true, will not be a game-changer for the phone industry.

      • I have changed some words in student's original sentence to aid comprehension and avoid clunkiness.; Although Hydrogen One has impressed many people, there were many skeptics and disbelievers when the new phone was announced due to the fact that many analysts believe that such a breakthrough won't make such a big change to the phone industry..

Despite this, I believe Hydrogen One will be a massive breakthrough in the smartphone industry.

      • I have shortened student's original concluding sentence to keep it short and dressed down to the student's bare opinion about the topic to sum things up.; Even though there are many doubters, haters, fans, and believers, this will no doubt be a massive breakthrough in the smartphone industry.

Source: http://www.bbc.com/news/technology-40527740


Red Announces First-Ever Holographic Phone

Most of us use smartphones on a daily basis, whether it be for calling, texting, playing games, playing music, etc. Although we have so much on our fingertips, we've always been stuck with a 2D interface. However, Red, the company best known for its high-end professional cameras, has created "Hydrogen One", the first-ever holographic phone. Although very little information has been leaked about the new phone, it has been revealed that it will be available in aluminum ($1,195), and titanium ($1,595), with preorder starting now. Hydrogen One has impressed many people, including Red's fans, but there are still many skeptics who believe analysts' opinion that such a breakthrough, even if true, will not be a game-changer for the phone industry. Despite this, I believe Hydrogen One will be a massive breakthrough in the smartphone industry.

Source: http://www.bbc.com/news/technology-40527740









Coffee May Actually Help You Live Longer

      • Remember to always capitalize the words in the title.
Coffee may actually help you live longer.

Eddie Perez 7/11/2017

Coffee is known to most as the morning drink that keeps you awake for the day and sometimes it is referred to as a drug.

      • What I did with this sentence remove and replace the extra unneeded words that made sentence wordy.; Coffee is most often known as a morning drink that keeps you awake for the day, and sometimes it is even referred to as a drug.

In the past, research has proved that drinking coffee could lower the risk of cardiovascular disease and diabetes.

      • I decided to add "in the" at the beginning to give the sentence a fluid transition. Remember that from time to time it is good to include transitions so the readers won't be confused when reading.; Past research proved that drinking coffee could lower the risk of cardiovascular disease and diabetes.

Currently, scientists and researchers are hypothesizing that coffee could potentially help you increase your lifespan according to new studies and research.

      • "Currently" is more professionally correct compared to "Well now." I omitted "and help you live longer" from the sentence because it was repetitive. "Potentially help you increase your lifespan," says the same thing as the latter so you don't need to say the same thing over again in different words.; Well now, scientists and researchers are hypothesizing that coffee could potentially help you increase your lifespan and help you live longer according to new studies and research.

According to the medical journal, Annals of Internal Medicine, one study displays coffee-drinking patterns of 185,000 Americans, and results show that the daily cup of coffee is tied to longer living.

      • It would be beneficial to the readers and to add merit to what you're saying if you included who is conducting these studies or what program and institution this information comes from. And there are too many "you/your" pronouns in this passage. Readers know you are talking to them, so there is no need to repeat the pronoun. I went into the article and found where this info was coming from. It is important to tell people where you are getting your info from.; One study displays coffee-drinking patterns of 185,000 Americans, and results show that your daily cup of coffee is tied to longer living.

Veronica Setiawan, an epidemiologist at the University of Southern California, and her team of researchers found that coffee reduces the risk of other life-threatening diseases such as heart disease, cancer, respiratory disease, stroke, diabetes and kidney disease.

      • I added some credit to this sentence. Whenever you are talking about a cure or reducing risk, it's important to establish where this is coming from.; Other research also shows that coffee reduces the risk of other life-threatening diseases such as heart disease, cancer, respiratory disease, stroke, diabetes and kidney disease.

So not only can your daily dose of coffee help you wake up in the morning, it can help you live your life to the fullest.

Source: http://abcnews.go.com/Health/java-drinkers-rejoice-coffee-live-longer/story?id=48555232 Edited by Michael Morrow

Coffee May Actually Help You Live Longer

Coffee is known to most as the morning drink that keeps you awake for the day and sometimes it is referred to as a drug. In the past, research has proved that drinking coffee could lower the risk of cardiovascular disease and diabetes. Currently, scientists and researchers are hypothesizing that coffee could potentially help you increase your lifespan according to new studies and research. According to the medical journal, Annals of Internal Medicine, one study displays coffee-drinking patterns of 185,000 Americans, and results show that the daily cup of coffee is tied to longer living. Veronica Setiawan, an epidemiologist at the University of Southern California, and her team of researchers found that coffee reduces the risk of other life-threatening diseases such as heart disease, cancer, respiratory disease, stroke, diabetes and kidney disease. So not only can your daily dose of coffee help you wake up in the morning, it can help you live your life to the fullest.

Source: http://abcnews.go.com/Health/java-drinkers-rejoice-coffee-live-longer/story?id=48555232