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A video game produced by Akili Interactive Labs has been shown to treat ADHD patients. The game sends its player to multiple fantasy worlds and, upon completion of a task, rewards the player with stars and points. The game targets central neurological neurons that control attention and impulsive behavior and activates certain neural networks. In an experiment with 348 children of ages 8 to 12, children who played the video game for over four years showed better results compared to children who played another game as a placebo. To get the best results, the researchers recommend using it for 30 minutes a day, five days a week, for up to four weeks. The game, however, has not been tested against psychotherapy or the sort and, thus, cannot be seen as its equal or superior.
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'''The Joy In Music Compositions'''
 
'''The Joy In Music Compositions'''
  

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Source: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/fact-or-fiction-video-games-are-the-future-of-education/




Video Game for ADHD A video game produced by Akili Interactive Labs has been shown to treat ADHD patients. The game sends its player to multiple fantasy worlds and, upon completion of a task, rewards the player with stars and points. The game targets central neurological neurons that control attention and impulsive behavior and activates certain neural networks. In an experiment with 348 children of ages 8 to 12, children who played the video game for over four years showed better results compared to children who played another game as a placebo. To get the best results, the researchers recommend using it for 30 minutes a day, five days a week, for up to four weeks. The game, however, has not been tested against psychotherapy or the sort and, thus, cannot be seen as its equal or superior. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/this-video-game-may-help-kids-with-adhd/




The Joy In Music Compositions

Songs evoke happiness or sadness, anger or despair, or positive or negative emotions. But how is this feat accomplished? Scientists have performed a study on music compositions to determine what factor a song plays in emotion. They did this by using labMT to analyze words and whether it brings out positive or negative emotions. They, then, had corresponded the positive words with the notes. The conclusion was that major and seventh chords had a high correlation with positive feelings. Source: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/have-scientists-found-a-secret-chord-for-happy-songs/




History of the 'Pledge of Allegiance'

The Pledge of Allegiance, which, in most cases, is executed in American schools daily, has been slightly altered from its original form over the years.

      • Using two adverbs so close together like that is awkward, add the “over the years” part to make sure your reader knows it’s not a recent alteration; The Pledge of Allegiance, commonly executed in American schools daily, had been slightly altered from its original form.

Written in August 1892 by Francis Bellamy, the pledge first read "I pledge allegiance to my Flag and the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all."

Gradually, changes to the pledge were made.

      • I would like to know WHY the changes were made – I feel that including this information would make your summary stronger.

In 1923, the pledge read "I pledge allegiance to the Flag of the United States of America and to the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all."

Then, in 1954, it became "I pledge allegiance to the flag of the United States of America, and to the republic for which it stands, one nation under God, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all."

The pledge, though changed throughout history, still brought forth feelings of patriotism.

      • This summary is grammatically pretty good, but I recommend adding some reasoning behind why the pledge kept changing over the years

History of the 'Pledge of Allegiance'

The Pledge of Allegiance, which, in most cases, is executed in American schools daily, has been slightly altered from its original form over the years. Written in August 1892 by Francis Bellamy, the pledge first read "I pledge allegiance to my Flag and the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." Gradually, changes to the pledge were made. In 1923, the pledge read "I pledge allegiance to the Flag of the United States of America and to the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." Then, in 1954, it became "I pledge allegiance to the flag of the United States of America, and to the republic for which it stands, one nation under God, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." The pledge, though changed throughout history, still brought forth feelings of patriotism.



History of the 'Pledge of Allegiance'

The Pledge of Allegiance, commonly executed in American schools daily, had been slightly altered from its original form. Written in August 1892 by Francis Bellamy, the pledge first read "I pledge allegiance to my Flag and the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." Gradually, changes to the pledge were made. In 1923, the pledge read "I pledge allegiance to the Flag of the United States of America and to the Republic for which it stands, one nation, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." Then, in 1954, it became "I pledge allegiance to the flag of the United States of America, and to the republic for which it stands, one nation under God, indivisible, with liberty and justice for all." The pledge, though changed throughout history, still brought forth feelings of patriotism. SOURCE: http://www.ushistory.org/documents/pledge.htm



A Possible New Way of Curing Obesity

Obesity may be "curable" with the injection of a protein.

Scientists have discovered that a protein called GDF15 can be abundantly found in lean animals more than it can be found in fatter creatures.

      • Sentence structure; Scientists have found that in many lean creatures a protein called GDF15 can be abundantly found as in comparison to fatter creatures.

Scientists have injected this protein into fatter creatures, which slimmed them down without any side-effects.

      • Passive voice, comma; Scientists have tried to inject this protein into fatter creatures which had slimmed them down without any side-effects.

In addition, after taking the injection, animals have been seen to prefer a low-fat diet.

As this protein has worked on animals, scientists are optimistic to test on humans.

However, the safety of doing so is murky.

      • EXPAND***

A Possible New Way of Curing Obesity

Obesity may be "curable" with the injection of a protein. Scientists have discovered that a protein called GDF15 can be abundantly found in lean animals more than it can be found in fatter creatures. Scientists have injected this protein into fatter creatures, which slimmed them down without any side-effects. In addition, after taking the injection, animals have been seen to prefer a low-fat diet. As this protein has worked on animals, scientists are optimistic to test on humans. However, the safety of doing so is murky.


A Possible New Way of Curing Obesity

Obesity may be "curable" with the injection of a protein. Scientists have found that in many lean creatures a protein called GDF15 can be abundantly found as in comparison to fatter creatures. Scientists have tried to inject this protein into fatter creatures which had slimmed them down without any side-effects. In addition, after taking the injection, animals have been seen to prefer a low-fat diet. As this protein has worked on animals, scientists are optimistic to test on humans. However, the safety of doing so is murky. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/scientists-zero-in-on-a-new-target-for-obesity/


Talking on the Phone Makes People Selectively Attentive While Driving

      • Avoid ambiguous ‘you,’ ‘attent’ is not a word, make the title actually connect to the article; Phone Addiction Will Make You Selectively Attent

Every day, people are always talking on their smartphones.

      • Comma, wrong “everyday/every day”, pluralize smartphone because you’re talking about plural people, relate it more specifically to the rest of the article; Everyday people are always looking at their smartphone.

A recent study, proven by older experiments, has shown that being glued to your smartphone will make you miss a lot of information.

      • Subject/verb agreement; A recent study, proven by older experiments, have shown that being glued to your smartphone will make you miss many information.

For example, talking on the phone while driving causes drivers to ignore hazard signs, because when people talk on the phone, they visualize the other person’s environment and actions.

      • Sentence structure, avoid ambiguous “you”, avoid passive voice avoid “etc.” lists; For example, calling while driving will make you ignore hazard signs because when you are calling someone you are visualizing his or her environment, actions, and so on.

This visual component taps into resources needed for accurate visual perception, which makes the driver miss out on details such as stop signs and speed limit signs.

      • Avoid ambiguous “you”, avoid “etc.” lists; This visual component taps into resources needed for accurate visual perception, and then you'll miss out on stop signs, speed limit signs, and so on.

This is proven by the “invisible gorilla” experiment, which shows that while an observer is trying to count the amount of passes a group makes in a basketball game, they will not notice a gorilla walk by, because they draw upon resources to count the basketball passes, ignoring other visuals.

      • Be more specific in your description of the experiment, avoid ambiguous “you”; This can be proven by the "invisible gorilla" experiment as while you are trying to count the amount of passes a group makes, you will not notice the gorilla walk by because you are drawing upon resources to accurately count the basketball pass, ignoring on other visuals.

This can be related to phone calls and distracted driving; because the driver is distracted, they have a higher likelihood to get into an accident.

      • Make the concluding sentence wrap up the rest of the article – since eye problems was not mentioned, don’t include it right at the end; Not only will phones cause you eye problems, but they will also have a tendency to get into multiple accidents.


Talking on the Phone Makes People Selectively Attentive While Driving

Every day, people are always talking on their smartphones. A recent study, proven by older experiments, has shown that being glued to your smartphone will make you miss a lot of information. For example, talking on the phone while driving causes drivers to ignore hazard signs, because when people talk on the phone, they visualize the other person’s environment and actions. This visual component taps into resources needed for accurate visual perception, which makes the driver miss out on details such as stop signs and speed limit signs. This is proven by the “invisible gorilla” experiment, which shows that while an observer is trying to count the amount of passes a group makes in a basketball game, they will not notice a gorilla walk by, because they draw upon resources to count the basketball passes, ignoring other visuals. This can be related to phone calls and distracted driving; because the driver is distracted, they have a higher likelihood to get into an accident.


Phone Addiction Will Make You Selectively Attent

Everyday people are always looking at their smartphone. A recent study, proven by older experiments, have shown that being glued to your smartphone will make you miss many information. For example, calling while driving will make you ignore hazard signs because when you are calling someone you are visualizing his or her environment, actions, and so on. This visual component taps into resources needed for accurate visual perception, and then you'll miss out on stop signs, speed limit signs, and so on. This can be proven by the "invisible gorilla" experiment as while you are trying to count the amount of passes a group makes, you will not notice the gorilla walk by because you are drawing upon resources to accurately count the basketball pass, ignoring on other visuals. Not only will phones cause you eye problems, but they will also have a tendency to get into multiple accidents. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/5-vital-things-you-cant-do-properly-when-youre-on-your-phone/



Correlation Between Sleeve Length and Hospital Infections

      • this article summary isn’t about doctors, it’s about sleeve length; Beware of Doctors

Every day, people attend their biannual health checkups to find out if there are any anomalies in their health.

      • Comma, be more specific in your description; Everyday people attend their biannual health checkups for any anomalies.

However, it has recently been shown that doctors, too, are a source of infections.

      • Order of words for flow, commas; However, recently it has been shown that doctors too are a source of infections.

A study, with 34 health care workers participating, required its participants to examine a mannequin for a "cauliflower mosaic virus" four times, twice with long sleeve and twice without.

Results show that twenty-five percent of the simulations when wearing long sleeves had the virus on their sleeves, compared to zero percent when wearing short sleeves.

Not only have they contaminated their sleeves, but about five percent of the workers who wore long sleeves had also contaminated the mannequin.

      • Comma; Not only have they contaminated their sleeves but about five percent of the workers who wore long sleeves had also contaminated the mannequin.

Despite such results, researches still have to experiment on whether or not short sleeves will have an effect on the number of infections spread in a hospital.

Correlation Between Sleeve Length and Hospital Infections

Every day, people attend their biannual health checkups to find out if there are any anomalies in their health. However, it has recently been shown that doctors, too, are a source of infections. A study, with 34 health care workers participating, required its participants to examine a mannequin for a "cauliflower mosaic virus" four times, twice with long sleeve and twice without. Results show that twenty-five percent of the simulations when wearing long sleeves had the virus on their sleeves, compared to zero percent when wearing short sleeves. Not only have they contaminated their sleeves, but about five percent of the workers who wore long sleeves had also contaminated the mannequin. Despite such results, researches still have to experiment on whether or not short sleeves will have an effect on the number of infections spread in a hospital.


Beware of Doctors

Everyday people attend their biannual health checkups for any anomalies. However, recently it has been shown that doctors too are a source of infections. A study, with 34 health care workers participating, required its participants to examine a mannequin for a "cauliflower mosaic virus" four times, twice with long sleeve and twice without. Results show that twenty-five percent of the simulations when wearing long sleeves had the virus on their sleeves, compared to zero percent when wearing short sleeves. Not only have they contaminated their sleeves but about five percent of the workers who wore long sleeves had also contaminated the mannequin. Despite such results, researches still have to experiment on whether or not short sleeves will have an effect on the number of infections spread in a hospital. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/long-sleeves-on-doctors-white-coats-may-spread-germs/


The Difference Between Critical Thinking and Intelligence

      • title doesn’t match the tone of the article; Intelligence Versus Critical Thinking

Intelligent people might do dumb things from time to time.

Intelligence, which is typically measure by IQ, is different from critical thinking; the latter is the ability to think rationally, and the former is the ability to memorize various things, such as equations and vocabulary.

      • Wording and sentence structure – avoid run-ons with clever punctuation, also avoid an “etc.”-like ending of a sentence; Intelligence, typically measured in IQ, is different from critical thinking as the latter is the ability to think rationally and the former is the ability to memorize equations, vocabulary, and so on.

Intelligent people are often assumed to be successful in life, but that is not always the case.

      • Verb choice, add “always” to avoid making a generalization; Intelligent people are often mistook to be successful in life, however that is not the case.

According to a study performed by Professor Heather A. Butler, critical thinkers experience fewer negative life events, such as having and forgetting an exam.

      • Capitalize titles, verb tense, avoid “etc.”-like lists; According to a study performed by professor Heather A. Butler, critical thinkers experienced fewer negative life events such as having debt, forgetting an exam, and so on.

Not only is critical thinking a significant skill for the future, but it can also be improved if lacking, whereas intelligence is mainly predetermined by genetics.

      • Comma, “PREdominantly PREdeteremined” is odd diction; Not only is critical thinking a significant skill for the future but it can also be improved if lacking, whereas intelligence is predominantly predetermined by genetics.

Therefore, critical think is just as, if not more, important than intelligence.

      • Order of wording; Critical thinking, therefore, is as, if not more, important than intelligence\


The Difference Between Critical Thinking and Intelligence

Intelligent people might do dumb things from time to time. Intelligence, which is typically measure by IQ, is different from critical thinking; the latter is the ability to think rationally, and the former is the ability to memorize various things, such as equations and vocabulary. Intelligent people are often assumed to be successful in life, but that is not always the case. According to a study performed by Professor Heather A. Butler, critical thinkers experience fewer negative life events, such as having and forgetting an exam. Not only is critical thinking a significant skill for the future, but it can also be improved if lacking, whereas intelligence is mainly predetermined by genetics. Therefore, critical think is just as, if not more, important than intelligence.


Intelligence Versus Critical Thinking

Intelligent people might do dumb things from time to time. Intelligence, typically measured in IQ, is different from critical thinking as the latter is the ability to think rationally and the former is the ability to memorize equations, vocabulary, and so on. Intelligent people are often mistook to be successful in life, however that is not the case. According to a study performed by professor Heather A. Butler, critical thinkers experienced fewer negative life events such as having debt, forgetting an exam, and so on. Not only is critical thinking a significant skill for the future but it can also be improved if lacking, whereas intelligence is predominantly predetermined by genetics. Critical thinking, therefore, is as, if not more, important than intelligence. SOURCE: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/why-do-smart-people-do-foolish-things/


High Risk of Baldness for Short People

Men who are shorter may have a higher risk of premature hair loss.

An international study of over 200,000 men's genetics was conducted by leadership of the University of Bonn.

Results show that premature hair loss is linked with other illnesses and diseases.

In the study, researchers identified 63 changes in the human chromosome, including a chromosome for short height.

      • Passive voice, wording; In the study, researchers had identified 63 changes in the human chromosome, one of which was short height.

However, premature hair loss only signals increased risk of getting illnesses, therefore short height does not result in an inevitable premature hair loss.

Even then, there is a high change that short people may have premature hair loss.


High Risk of Baldness for Short People

Men who are shorter may have a higher risk of premature hair loss. An international study of over 200,000 men's genetics was conducted by leadership of the University of Bonn. Results show that premature hair loss is linked with other illnesses and diseases. In the study, researchers identified 63 changes in the human chromosome, including a chromosome for short height. However, premature hair loss only signals increased risk of getting illnesses, therefore short height does not result in an inevitable premature hair loss. Even then, there is a high change that short people may have premature hair loss.


High Risk of Baldness for Short People

Men who are shorter may have a higher risk of premature hair loss. An international study of over 200,000 men's genetics was conducted by leadership of the University of Bonn. Results show that premature hair loss is linked with other illnesses and diseases. In the study, researchers had identified 63 changes in the human chromosome, one of which was short height. However, premature hair loss only signals increased risk of getting illnesses, therefore short height does not result in an inevitable premature hair loss. Even then, there is a high change that short people may have premature hair loss. SOURCE: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2017/03/170308084034.htm